“To say that that is an understatement would be an insult to both statements and prefixes.”
Hehehehe. Yeah!
And that is how Logan and Veronica (and her trusty sidekick Backup, too, of course) come to live together over the summer.
Wonderful, just perfect narrator intrusion. Heh.
“Premature?” Logan pretends to consider the thought. “No, but now that you mention it, I’m pretty sure that’s how you were conceived.”
Great dialog. Oh, that's [almost] all I need in a fic.
And another excellent piece:
“Yeah,” he confirms with a shrug. “So, I met this girl. Amazing. Totally hot. The sex was great. But I realized I was really crazy about her when it turned out the conversation was even better.”
And last, but not least, the detail, the actual Cherry On Top, which made Logan perfect and complete for me.
Unexpectedly, he leans down and pecks her on the cheek. It is chaste, and uncertain, and when she looks at him, he appears vaguely nervous, like he doesn’t know if he should’ve made such a bold move.
Because this is so Logan. Perfect.
I love the details that make up the scenes, everything from scratching the dog behind the ears, opening the fridge, drinking, vacuuming, teaching how to surf. Great stuff, great writing, great narrative changes (although there is this mixed POV with the surfing and night / love scene...).
I love it when the author is clearly in control of things (sorry for saying that, I know that it may offend, but I'm browsing through VM fics, and there's lots of... stuff out there, so I want to let you know I see the difference). The story flows seamlessly, and is so gorgeously packed with details and so gorgeously visible and palpable. Love it.
(Also, the bungalow in the picture is so that bungalow)
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Date: 2006-10-01 10:26 pm (UTC)Hehehehe. Yeah!
And that is how Logan and Veronica (and her trusty sidekick Backup, too, of course) come to live together over the summer.
Wonderful, just perfect narrator intrusion. Heh.
“Premature?” Logan pretends to consider the thought. “No, but now that you mention it, I’m pretty sure that’s how you were conceived.”
Great dialog. Oh, that's [almost] all I need in a fic.
And another excellent piece:
“Yeah,” he confirms with a shrug. “So, I met this girl. Amazing. Totally hot. The sex was great. But I realized I was really crazy about her when it turned out the conversation was even better.”
And last, but not least, the detail, the actual Cherry On Top, which made Logan perfect and complete for me.
Unexpectedly, he leans down and pecks her on the cheek. It is chaste, and uncertain, and when she looks at him, he appears vaguely nervous, like he doesn’t know if he should’ve made such a bold move.
Because this is so Logan. Perfect.
I love the details that make up the scenes, everything from scratching the dog behind the ears, opening the fridge, drinking, vacuuming, teaching how to surf. Great stuff, great writing, great narrative changes (although there is this mixed POV with the surfing and night / love scene...).
I love it when the author is clearly in control of things (sorry for saying that, I know that it may offend, but I'm browsing through VM fics, and there's lots of... stuff out there, so I want to let you know I see the difference). The story flows seamlessly, and is so gorgeously packed with details and so gorgeously visible and palpable. Love it.
(Also, the bungalow in the picture is so that bungalow)